Unexpected failure | Poem
A poem about success, boundless pride, adulation of society and sudden tragedy.
I believed in myself too much,
While flying higher in the sky.
Higher in the sky of success,
Farther from the crowd of mortals.I received praises too much,
When news spread like a wildfire.
Wildfire, powerful but blind,
Burned everything on its path.I soared in the sky,
and roared like a lion.
I heard endless claps,
Until the thunder came.It hurt my wings so deep,
I collapsed to the abyss.
In the dark I weep alone,
All my glory has gone.
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This is amazing Unni
Truth is…
I am trying to write a poem like yours but i give up
It is very time consuming π
8 line poem is so easy π
The number of lines doesn’t matter the words do. This is really good.
Deep thoughts, reality check!
Thanks ji π
No new posts ha? Busy?
Naah. I did so, today.
Seems you are busy ha ???
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Nice poem πthe idea is presented in a great way
Thanks a lot ji π
Amazing and deep!!
Thank you π π
Unni, I think at one point or another we all have flown too high and crashed… You are just human!
Yes π
Good morning π
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Bewildered by the spectaculary piece work.Every syallable is unparalleled.
Thank you neha ji π i am so happy to see such unexpected words of encouragement π
It’s truly a pleasure to read your works.They left me astounded.
I am completely pleased with your comments bcoz they r high quality words condensed in a single line. Special morning coffee for those who comments the best
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I am imparting my valuable remark to a work that deserved my words.Thanks for the coffee!Enjoy the day.
Will you comment like this in all my future posts?
Or are you just a evanescent dream ? π€
All i get is “great post unni”, “good post unni” etc etc
Your comments are beyond my expectations.. you have already taken me to the sky with your words
If a writer can pen words that is the manifestation of his intensive inner conscious,then this fellow writer will always be by your side,just as the moonshine outstreches its noctilucent light infinitely on the universe.
This is jus really awesome ! Jus remember FALIURE is always temporary !! N the glory u jus faded will burn with vivid colors someday β€β€
Thank you so much for the valuable comment π time is irreversible and i wont get what i lost… but i am glad to meet someone who has a big heart to read, understand and share hope π
Yeah! But don’t worry …time also heals everything ! So jus get up , go on and have faith in you .
All the best ! β€
Hey! That was a really good story about success and failure. I have this feeling that if you put 3rd stanza before the 2nd one it would be much better in terms of the events order. A suggestion. And also your blog is great!
Thank you so much
Actually, i dont know how to write a poem.. this is just an experiment.. no rules poem. But i greatly appreciate your feedback π thank u so much
Me too friend.. I’m figuring it out as well.